Monday 9 September 2013

cinderella


 This is my cinderella story
hope you enjoy it :)


https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LONyleRQ8cEDfJ8O-8ocugp3NO8ix3bqjO0RtWjvIvU/edit?usp=sharing

5 comments:

  1. Cool I liked how you described whatever that was that i forgot.

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  2. Nice story. That message at the end to me is very true. :) The describing of cinderella's dress was good. :)

    Kayleigh, Mokoia intermediate

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  3. I like it how you used the real bits of the story but summed it up into a story and I like that you put your own words in it. Ka Pai !!!
    Rayan
    P3 Mokoia Int

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  4. I liked your story, and the ending was good. Next time, check some of your spelling and punctuation.

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  5. Great sense of humor and lanuage!
    Next time put some awesome words in to picture the reader's mind.

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